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For the record, I much prefer haiku about Japan, and have written a dozen or so of those alone, not including another 400 or so words of other Japanese poetry forms... but I need those  for a project :D
So here I am showing off what I've learned about the deceptively easy poetry form of haiku. Notice that I have split each one into two parts: you're suposed to do that. There should be a standalone sentence in each poem. Also, they are supposed to capture a moment in time. No figurative language is traditionally used... well I think I used one simile but... shh at least I noticed >.>
Now I need to focus my attention back on sonnets :la: In particular one I was going to write for a competition but missed entirely. 

Hope you like it! :meow:
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EpicPidgeot Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2015  Hobbyist
Psst this poem is amazing
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Silvery-Storm Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2015
Thank you! :heart: :heart:
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EpicPidgeot Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2016  Hobbyist
< 3
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MuteStorm Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow... just.... wow.

#HaikuFangirl
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Silvery-Storm Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2015
Haha thank you! :D 
I've learned a lot about haikus since I wrote these, I should really write some new ones :)
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MuteStorm Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aweshum! We should do a collab sometime!! :happybounce: 
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Winter-Wisp Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student Digital Artist
DUDE TODAY IS THE LAST DAY FOR THE COMPETITON? arent u GONNA ENTER? (wait u submitted right if not go!)
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Silvery-Storm Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014
Ahahaha... 
Yeah, I did XD After doing nothing yesterday I made something up after you sent me this message. Here's hoping we both get a prize :meow:
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Winter-Wisp Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Student Digital Artist
wahoO! Or at least get into the book they're making of the better entries
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Silvery-Storm Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014
Or we could get a book prize! :dummy: If we get in the book then we can say we're published again though :iconheplz:
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Winter-Wisp Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Student Digital Artist
OH DANG?!/!?!!

i hope we get in now omg
shoulda spent more time on the poem!!!! DANG SON

Also i am reminded I should work on Kamari's world again haha
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Shinkami Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student Digital Artist
YOU STINKIN GENIUS //marries your poetry now I even ship myself with your writing, i have lost control but seriously...the way you create/suggest an image without overtly stating it is brilliant. "an interest of birds" really got me - I instantly saw all the little pigeons skipping about the ground and pecking up food, and I love how the individual elements you address build the whole of the city. Each paragraph reflects a different spectrum of the populace, the scenery, the time of day...

I LOVE IT
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Silvery-Storm Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014
Thank you! ;A; These aren't anywhere near as good as the other I sent you, however that might just be because I have barely any interest in cityscapes... Yeah, you have e_e //slapped
Interesting that you would like that line. I was trying to do something more suggestive through those lines: including less detail but more thought. Although I think my favourites are the fourth and third-last, and that where you see cute and amiable little pigeons I see scruffy ones glaring from the gaps in the buildings. :stare: I would have organised the poems in a more chronological order, except that I think that it's more telling to see the process of thought. Whether it is or not :iconfacepalmplz:
Prepare to see some sonnets soon! :dummy:
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oreii Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
:iconclapplz: This is awesome as always and your use of words are amazing as always!! :iconaaah-plz:

THAT LAST ONE THOUGH! WASN'T EXPECTING THE LAST ONE! XD
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Silvery-Storm Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014
Aww thank you! :tighthug: Word choice is important here c: Haiku are great for writing down short descriptions that you'd like to use somewhere else someday.

I was going to put it in the A/N but then I decided not to XDD And yeah, like I said I have been writing lots of haiku. I just can't upload them because I need them for a project... I could always send them to you on Skype or email? I like them a lot more honestly ^^'
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oreii Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
no problem!! ^^
I can understand that actually, it makes a lot of sense! :icontuzkidance2plz:

I'm so glad you included it in the thing itself, it had a really funny effect ahaha!!!
You can do if you like!
I'd be more than happy to read them :iconbrightfutureplz:
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